Another offering for the Friday Fictioneers. Click here to look at some more stories based on this picture.
Theo sat, transfixed by the world he saw in his mind. The images burned with HD clarity: icy spires towering over pristine valleys where the twelve-tusked geffalo stomped beneath skyscraper-high orchids; the Umon people soaring above their island homes; and the Baruk tribes labouring deep in their frozen caverns. Everywhere there was life.
He could see the whole of his tiny, perfect little world spinning like a pearl in his mind, every neuron bursting with the ecstasy of pure creation. He wanted more though: he wanted it to be real.
He started with the globe. That was the easy part.
December 13th, 2012 at 11:16 pm
Well done David…I like this.
December 13th, 2012 at 11:53 pm
I like everything about this. It’s a simple story but told in beautiful language. My mind ran on a similar track (but that’s not why I like your story.)
December 14th, 2012 at 5:55 am
I like it. Written by someone who admits to being ..”quirky and weird.”
December 14th, 2012 at 7:56 am
I’m transfixed by this one. Well done, David. I enjoyed your new world creation, “spinning like a pearl in his mind.” I’m stumped by this prompt.
December 14th, 2012 at 8:48 am
It took me a lot of thought too.
December 14th, 2012 at 8:50 am
This one is a challenge. I’m still stumped. All I can of is “Man cave gone bad.” You did good!
December 14th, 2012 at 8:59 am
I like the man cave idea. I thought disco ball too, but I wasn’t sure where to go with that. Maybe mini-nuclear reactor?
December 14th, 2012 at 9:03 am
Oh, hey, I like disco ball! Mini-nuclear reactor, I have to think about that one….hahha. You wrote yours beautifully.
December 14th, 2012 at 1:18 pm
I like it. A story about someone envisioning a story.
December 14th, 2012 at 3:05 pm
what a world will it be!
what happened to the first instalment of the vampire story mister?
December 14th, 2012 at 4:10 pm
yeah, it’s taking me a while, isn’t it. I was going to post it on Thursday but because of other busyness, I didn’t have as much time to work on it and I didn’t want to publish it until I was ready. However, I PROMISE it will be there Monday morning when you wake up 🙂
December 14th, 2012 at 4:14 pm
oh boy!!!!! now its monday????
December 14th, 2012 at 4:19 pm
Fine…I’ll try to post it tomorrow. I don’t want an angry Trisha on my case. 🙂
December 14th, 2012 at 4:20 pm
remember the vampire story i told you, the true one?
December 14th, 2012 at 4:21 pm
I see where you going with this. I’ll be good.
December 14th, 2012 at 4:24 pm
good! thank you! 🙂
December 14th, 2012 at 4:06 pm
The image of ‘sky scraper high orchids’ is one that will stay with me. Truly original take on the prompt.
December 14th, 2012 at 4:21 pm
Thank you. I found that this prompt took a lot of thought. Looking through comments on other stories, I see I’m not the only one.
December 14th, 2012 at 7:37 pm
A clever imaginative piece. Theo is a visionary. Good job.
December 14th, 2012 at 7:56 pm
That was quite imaginative and simple. I was visualising the world that Theo was visualising 🙂
December 14th, 2012 at 10:58 pm
Very well written.
December 14th, 2012 at 11:03 pm
Great and imaginative descriptions of exotic worlds. Nicely done. Ron
December 14th, 2012 at 11:15 pm
Thanks, it’s the sort of thing I love to make up anyway, even if I don’t write stories with them.
December 15th, 2012 at 1:40 am
“He could see the whole of his tiny, perfect little world spinning like a pearl in his mind, every neuron bursting with the ecstasy of pure creation.” Pure poetry, a pleasure to read, great imagery and just flat out beautiful language.
December 15th, 2012 at 10:20 am
Thank you, Tom. I appreciate your comments.
December 16th, 2012 at 7:28 am
Ah, a wordsmith here… I liked his dream, then down to a guy in his garage making a globe… Then, that’s what makes it go round… the dreamers. Nice.
December 16th, 2012 at 10:52 am
i’m noticing many people went apocalyptic/utoptian/other-worldly things, and it’s working out positively. well done. word choices that forced a slow reading added to the feeling of “trudging” happening in the context.
December 17th, 2012 at 10:33 am
If only we could imagine and it would be.
December 17th, 2012 at 7:08 pm
That would be either amazing or terrible. The human mind has amazing heights and depths. Still, I could put it to good use. Even a holodeck would be amazing.
December 17th, 2012 at 9:12 pm
I can see why he would want it to be real.
December 18th, 2012 at 5:24 pm
A riff on the power of intent? i like it.