This week is a major holiday in Korea called Chuseok, which is like Thanksgiving. I am on the road now and writing this from a hotel room. Luckily, it had a computer, or I would have to write it on my phone.
copyright John Nixon
The elderly man stood in the doorway of the shop, facing a mannequin in a white dress.
“I know you don’t talk much,” he said, “but I’ve seen you here, day after day as I pass by and I wanted to tell you that I really like you. Would you have dinner with me sometime?”
I felt pity for him. The poor, senile man had fallen in love with a mannequin. Should I say anything?
At that moment, a middle-aged woman stepped from behind the mannequin, blushing furiously.
The man beamed. “There you go. You don’t need to be shy.”
September 18th, 2013 at 8:05 pm
indeed 🙂 lovely story.
groetjes, Francina
September 18th, 2013 at 8:07 pm
Dear David,
I’m grinning uncontrollably. I loved your unexpected ending.
You really had me going with the guy talking to the mannequin. We have a regular customer in our store, a very sweet lady, who talks to someone no one else sees. She even has arguments with this invisible person.
Nice one…very nice indeed.
Shalom,
Rochelle
September 18th, 2013 at 8:35 pm
Thank you, Rochelle. There seems to be a bunch of senility stories in the last month or so, so I thought I’d turn this one on its head. 🙂
September 18th, 2013 at 9:19 pm
Good fun…nice one.
September 18th, 2013 at 10:10 pm
a story well-told. well, mine also talks of a kind of senility. Do take a look:) Thanks
September 18th, 2013 at 10:56 pm
Good one, David. Glad you didn’t have to try to write it on your phone, though. But since I still have a “dumb phone”, perhaps it’s easier than I think. Then again, probably not.
janet
September 19th, 2013 at 10:09 am
Thanks. No, it’s not that easy writing on a phone, especially all the extras like linking a copy/pasting script and whatnot.
September 19th, 2013 at 1:58 am
LOL!! 😀
September 19th, 2013 at 2:16 am
LOVE the twist at the end. Thanks for the laugh.
September 21st, 2013 at 10:47 pm
Glad you liked it. 🙂
September 19th, 2013 at 2:56 am
The man might be senile but he knows what he wants.
September 21st, 2013 at 10:47 pm
At that age, you can’t wait around. Gotta be direct.
September 19th, 2013 at 5:42 am
How romantic! I love it. 🙂
September 21st, 2013 at 10:47 pm
I have a romantic streak in me, somewhere between the dark and the weird. Glad you liked it. 🙂
September 22nd, 2013 at 2:28 am
That’s not such a bad thing. Evens things out 🙂
September 19th, 2013 at 6:49 am
He he. Liked the kicker 🙂
September 21st, 2013 at 10:46 pm
🙂 Thanks.
September 19th, 2013 at 7:35 am
I suspect the commentator is the one blushing furiously now. Feel good story.
September 21st, 2013 at 10:46 pm
I’m sure. He’ll probably slink away quietly.
September 19th, 2013 at 1:23 pm
that was an excellent twist, and it brought me a smile
September 21st, 2013 at 10:45 pm
I’m glad. 🙂
September 19th, 2013 at 3:21 pm
Nice twist David, and believable story.
September 19th, 2013 at 10:44 pm
A nice twist.
September 20th, 2013 at 1:12 am
Excellent! Excellent! How wrong she was and how daring he is!
September 21st, 2013 at 10:20 pm
Thanks! I guess he’s past the age of being shy.
September 20th, 2013 at 1:47 am
Excellent David
Never too old for love
My post would go with this well
September 21st, 2013 at 10:19 pm
I hope I never stop being romantic, no matter how old I am. 🙂
September 20th, 2013 at 4:56 am
Neat twist there at the end… and I hope the blush on the lady’s cheeks means nervous excitement and a “yes” will be forthcoming.
September 21st, 2013 at 10:18 pm
I think so. My idea was that she was just really shy, but liked him anyway. At least I’m an optimist. 🙂
September 20th, 2013 at 7:45 am
Hehe! Cleverly done!
September 21st, 2013 at 9:57 pm
🙂
September 20th, 2013 at 8:35 am
What a great ending! Well done, you!
September 21st, 2013 at 9:57 pm
Thank you~ 🙂
September 20th, 2013 at 9:19 am
Most excellent, darling! Though I think I would have also enjoyed it if the mannequin came to life like something out of a cheesy ’80s movie.
September 21st, 2013 at 9:57 pm
I could see that too. I wouldn’t be surprised if one of the Fictioneers stories featured that. 🙂
September 20th, 2013 at 7:20 pm
Dear David,
Delightful in its premise and deft in execution, your story put a smile on my lips and a little joy in my heart.
Aloha,
Doug
September 20th, 2013 at 9:25 pm
That’s what I was hoping for, Doug. 🙂
September 20th, 2013 at 7:29 pm
Well, I guess the joke is on the narrator. That doesn’t happen too often. One advantage about being senile is you make the same new friends over and over again.
September 20th, 2013 at 9:24 pm
And you can hide your own Easter eggs. 🙂
September 21st, 2013 at 7:51 am
A sweet tale! He may senile, but I think he’s quite the dashing, romantic. Very nice.
September 21st, 2013 at 9:52 pm
Yeah, I love older romantic people. He isn’t senile though, in the story.
September 22nd, 2013 at 3:11 am
Oh, look at that. I jumped to conclusions!
September 22nd, 2013 at 8:43 am
🙂
September 21st, 2013 at 3:33 pm
Very nice ending.. I’m warm inside.
September 21st, 2013 at 9:51 pm
Thanks. 🙂
September 21st, 2013 at 10:23 pm
Very clever. Like it a lot.
September 22nd, 2013 at 4:05 am
This made me smile.
Thanks, I needed that.
September 22nd, 2013 at 7:38 pm
just loved it!