I’m quite late this week, but I’ve been pretty busy. Still, the end is in sight: two more days until we move. Things will still be hectic, but at least I won’t have all the packing and cleaning I have now.
Mommy’s Little Miracle
Pastel colors brushed onto old, warped walls. The pungent smell of new paint mingled with the lusty cries of new life in the next room. The last few days had been a whirlwind of activity, a maelstrom of emotions: anticipation at the hospital, a few moments of fear and now, pure elation.
She had long given up on having a family, but now here he was, her little miracle.
Well, almost hers. Her eyes flicked to the TV news. A few more months. When she had outlasted the searches and the Amber alerts, he would be hers forever.
June 20th, 2014 at 12:30 pm
…Wow… that’s all…
June 20th, 2014 at 1:23 pm
A desperate act and totally plausible. Great story, David. Good luck with the move!
June 20th, 2014 at 5:19 pm
best of luck with the shifting ! 🙂
June 20th, 2014 at 8:33 pm
I knew there’d be a twist, but didn’t expect it to be that. Actually, I was thinking along the lines of an alien baby, so this is much more plausible 😀 Great story!
June 20th, 2014 at 11:18 pm
Shocked me there! I want her caught! Very crafted story.
June 21st, 2014 at 2:34 pm
me too anyone who steals someone’s baby is really really wicked- cant they adopt one?
June 21st, 2014 at 4:12 pm
The twist was beautifully paced.
June 21st, 2014 at 6:59 pm
I’m sure this could have happened – even to Baby Lisa that disappeared a year ago in Kansas City. No ransom, nothing. Maybe someone is doing this. It’s so darn scary and the parents will live under suspicion. I just pray for the well being of the child! Good story! Nan 🙂
June 22nd, 2014 at 9:30 am
Mommy is very bad. Nice twist at the end.
June 23rd, 2014 at 8:04 pm
David, This hits home because it’s happening so much here in India. One woman carried a baby out in a bag. The camera in the hospital took a photo of it Even with those cameras the person is often not caught. I suspect someone is payed off not to notice. Anything is possible as babies are worth money, so the kidnappings continue. Well written. —Susan
June 23rd, 2014 at 10:21 pm
Now that’s a twist! From a loving mom to a crazed kidnapper in an instance.
June 24th, 2014 at 7:04 pm
I’m late getting around to commenting as I’m enjoying out of town guests and won’t be getting around to everyone’s. As always, I have to stop by greenwalledtower of my Friday Fictioneers experience is incomplete.
So very well done, sir. From start to finish, the set-up to the reveal. Nuff said other than “Bravo!”
June 25th, 2014 at 3:04 pm
missssssssssssssssssing your posts
June 25th, 2014 at 6:27 pm
I’m missing them too and missing reading yours. These days I’m traveling all day so even when I have internet access, I dont have energy. 😦
July 5th, 2014 at 9:34 am
Ooh . . . evil twist at the end, David. Skillful spun, this web of yours.
All my best,
July 5th, 2014 at 11:06 pm