“But then…” The Beginning of an Epic Chain Story

Well folks, today is your lucky day: a day you can participate in a chain story of epic proportions. Or not. It’s up to you.

Here are the guidelines:

1. Add your section of the story in the comments, picking up from the last comment.

2. Starting with “But then” is encouraged, but not required.

3. A maximum of 3 sentences.

4. Please, no swearing, explicit sex or gore. For the children, you know 🙂

5. Feel free to post more than once (although maybe not in a row).

This is an experiment, so we’ll see how well it work. It will go on as long as people keep posting. I will occasionally repost the comments in the main body, so just make sure you read through the comments to see what the last one was. Here we go:

The sun was shining and Jennifer was sure it was going to be a wonderful day. She ate her breakfast with gusto, got dressed in a light-hearted way and strode outside, whistling a jaunty tune. She checked the mail, but then… (1)

she noticed the mail box was empty. Jennifer frowned, realizing the important package from her employers was late, and it was never late. Pulling out her cell phone, she started to place a call, but then… (2)

She remembered that she shouldn’t discuss the package on an unsecured line. The last time an employee had made that mistake the consequences had been severe. She turned to walk back inside, but then… (3)

a strange man grabbed Jennifer’s arm. He was dressed in black from head to toe. “Don’t use the cell phone. They will know where we are!” he hissed. “What? What are you talking about? Who are you?” cried Jennifer, but then… (4)

Something caught her eye about him. There was some sort of a glint in his eyes. There was something wrong with the way he spoke, the way he used his inflections and it worried her because …. (5)

she feared he might be a robot. Wresting free from his grip Jennifer turned and high-tailed it back into the house. As she frantically latched her door, she started shaking uncontrollably. (6)

But then the door burst apart as a laser beam shot through it. “Don’t you recognize me?” he shouted, moving forward robotically. She felt the world spinning around her, as if she was going to faint, but then… (7)

everything went quiet and she felt very calm and somehow..happy. She looked at this person in front of her who had dropped to one knee, he was looking up at her, an open ring-box in his hand. “Jennifer”, he said ” you are a professional jewel thief, you would know, please can you tell me what this is worth?” but then… (8)

just as she was about to answer, it all came flashing back and her mouth went dry. This was no stranger, it was Jake Robison, the guy she partnered with to pull off a major diamond heist in Germany eight years ago. “Jake?” she asked, but then….. (9)

her eyes were drawn back to object in the box. With a great deal of confusion, she realized she was not looking at a diamond, or even a ring. It was spherical, crystalline, hollow, and appeared to be… (10)

a geode – a Keokuk geode. “I’m not that familiar with geodes – where did you get it?” she asked. Jake cleared his throat and growled, “museum in Germany, me and Oskar. Just as we were headed out the roof door I caught a bullet in the throat and Oskar is dead”. (11)

About David Stewart

I am a writer of anything quirky and weird. I love most genres of fiction and in each there are stories that I would consider "my kind of story". View all posts by David Stewart

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