October 19, 2015

Brothers in the Fatherland

Brothers in the Fatherland

The guards never check the back, my brother Kurt had said.

I crouched in breathless darkness, rain Niagara Fallsing down the windows. Kurt was talking to the guard, getting me through security.

I gripped my pistol. Kurt was loyal but I knew that only a bullet in the tyrant’s head would set the nation free.

I heard a command and the van moved forward. We were in. Kurt thought this was intelligence bureau training. This would kill him.

I’m sorry, Kurt.

The van doors flew open. Rifles pointed at me. “I’m sorry,” Kurt said. “It kills me to do this.”

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This entry was posted on Monday, October 19th, 2015 at 7:23 pm and tagged with assassination, betrayal, brothers, fear, fiction, flash fiction, Friday Fictioneers, night, rain and posted in Friday Fictioneers. You can follow any responses to this entry through the RSS 2.0 feed.

10 responses to “Brothers in the Fatherland”

Amy Reese
October 19th, 2015 at 10:41 pm

It didn’t happen quite the way he planned. It appears that he was set up from the beginning. I like the title, too.

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- David Stewart
  October 21st, 2015 at 11:16 pm
  
  Sometimes I find the title comes easily, but not in this case. This was the closest I could get to something concise and pithy. Glad you liked it.
  
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rochellewisoff
October 20th, 2015 at 5:52 am

Dear David,

It certainly killed one of them, didn’t it? I love the term Niagra Fallsing. Very creative. Better late than never.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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- David Stewart
  October 21st, 2015 at 11:15 pm
  
  It probably will kill one of them, although I guess you can fill in the rest of the story. I like the term Niagara Fallsing and might story using it in normal conversation, if it ever rains here again.
  
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Dale
October 20th, 2015 at 7:12 am

And so it goes…

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Suzanne Joshi
October 20th, 2015 at 8:06 am

It seems there’s not only no honor among thieves, there’s none between brothers either. Well done, David. 🙂 — Suzanne

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- David Stewart
  October 21st, 2015 at 11:14 pm
  
  Thanks, Suzanne. There may be honor of a sort, but definitely conflicting loyalties.
  
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Joy Pixley
October 20th, 2015 at 8:45 am

Ah, the perfect punishment for betraying your brother is him doing it more effectively. I’ll put in another vote for the great image of “Niagara Fallsing.”. I also like the twist on the meaning of it “killing” Kurt to do this – nicely done..

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- David Stewart
  October 21st, 2015 at 11:13 pm
  
  Thanks Joy. Actually, I thought of that term for the rain before I even thought of this story. 🙂 It is effective, eh?
  
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sharmishtha basu
November 13th, 2015 at 1:48 am

ouch!

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